Hello everyone today is a magnificent day we are writing a new SEXXY pragragh we also have written first paragraph but this is a new one this paragraph are being written to tell you what kind of chaos and conflict but the slides and the paragraph under here enjoy. i learnt that this is a happy and sad funny movie. This has helped me with writing on how conflict and chaos works. My favourite part about the movie study is watching the movie and writing the paragraph
Sorry I tried to fix the length but it keeps on going back to this.
ReplyDeleteHi EJ
ReplyDeleteThanks for taking on some feedback to fix up your paragraph. I wonder though if you re-read this, you can identify any other bits that are not as formal as we want in academic writing.
I wonder if 'amazing relationship' is the correct term you wish to use for the relationship between Ricky and child welfare.
I think you have a good idea, but some of the supporting evidence is a bit mucky.
- Miss Birtch